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Across The Night

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It was the phantom ship Silvara,
That sailed across the night,
Carrying me away from all I knew,
Only the moon provided light.

It's sails were red like crimson blood,
Each one had it's own voice,
Given life by the evening wind,
Staying aboard was my choice.

The crew members were silent,
Most of the time nothing was said,
Despite the silence we all understood,
We all had voices in our head.

Peace was found upon the phantom ship,
The mood was warm despite the cold,
Across the night we sailed til dawn,
And then darkness grew more bold.

It overwhelmed the sun so bright,
To offer us a bit more peace,
Our escape sailed on perpetual wings,
Within the black we found release.

Losing the sun didn't dim the light,
Because it burned within my heart,
I knew the sun would be back soon,
And with it would come a fresh start.

But until then I gazed up at the stars,
Admiring their light warm and pure,
This light resides inside my soul,
For those who pursue it's allure.

Though I'm attracted to the phantom ship,
We parted ways beneath the sun,
Perhaps some night we'll sail again,
But for now the day and I are one.

My world seems a little brighter now,
All I needed was to get away,
To just escape it all for a little while,
It took a voyage to find the way.

It was the phantom ship Silvara,
That carried me to a better place,
I've brought my darkness home with me,
But you won't see it on my face.
Honestly, I don't have a whole lot to say about this poem. It's been a while since I've written anything this long, and I just wanted to try something new. I'm really happy with how it turned out. I'd get further into it, but I'd prefer to let everyone take their own meaning from it.

I hope you enjoy it. :)
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VicariouSoul's avatar
I really love your in-depth attention to your rhymes, form, and use of words.
Everything neatly pulled together and I see nothing but effort put into this.
I also like how you integrated your name to the poem. It's a neat thing.

I believe I would be quite happy with this too had it been my piece. You know
what I've been trying lately that maybe you should take a shot at? Try doing
some unrhymed/rhymed quatrains in a poem sometime.

Here is an example excerpt from one of my poems in the works called "Our Big Boss Mother"

Quote, "Our Mother, she’s such a big boss
Without one wink of schlepping!
How, in all her rampant stepping
She cannot keel or be keeled?" End quote

These are really fun stanzas to write, and sometimes are even more better sounding than every line rhyming as it feels less force. It gives you a sort of freedom in between without having to rhyme so much. Anyway, this is just a suggestion you can try, that's all.

Your poem has been accepted in our Group :iconpoetrys-renaissance:



Thank You for sharing your work!
Siryan