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Beloved, you are like a present
A present that only you can give away
I'm not the only one who sees you
Not the only man who wants what's inside

But honestly, you've got more then one layer
There is so much more then just skin underneath
I want to peel back the layers of your heart
And commune with your radiant soul

Other men, they see a layer of clothing
They want the lustrous skin beneath
Skin alone will never be enough for me
Those unseen layers are the ones I would unwrap

Beloved, I mean the unconscious walls within
I wish to disarm your age old defense mechanisms
To have tendrils of my passion sooth your core
I desperately want your heart to be like my own

It's a lot to take in, but I mean every word
I'm not like the shallow men pursuing only the physical
Your heart and spirit are the things that I desire
To be bathed in the light emanating from inside you

But I'm not just here to take, I wish to give as well
To offer you every fiber on my being in return
It isn't something that I would casually give away
But I wouldn't ever consider offering you anything less

Beloved, you are so much more then most people see
They do not see the depth or feel your warmth
I pray that you choose a man who wants you for just you
A kind of man whose type is a rarity upon this world
Men my age don't generally think like this. I'm just going to throw that out there. At the age of twenty one true love is often the last thing on a guys mind. Obviously we all want it, but we tend to pursue it a little later in life. Usually we're just too wild at my age.

But, I'm not that type of guy. I'm not the wild, partying, reckless, shallow guy who's looking for just a relationship. When I look, I look for a life partner. And that's what I desperately want. To have someone I can unwrap. To have someone I can explore entirely. Everything about them, physical and otherwise.

All this being said, I'm quite personally involved in this particular poem. And I'm happy how it turned out. I generally keep my poems a bit shorter, and I usually have a rhyme scheme of sorts. But this time around.. the message alone was the important thing.

I hope you like it. :D
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effinglovely Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012
"tendrils of my passion soothe your core" wow, what a line. I love this. You are a saaappy sap. Ahh! :3 <3
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AzialSilvara Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
^^;
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mangagoddess1 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011  Hobbyist
Wow...wow...WOW, this is what i totallt feel like about my boyfriend and for somereason i feel i haven't found the right time to try anything...
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AzialSilvara Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
All in good time! You want the depth, but don't rush it. Let things happen naturally.
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zeow Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011
I love this! Its just how i feel about someone right now!
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AzialSilvara Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Glad to hear it!
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MissGypsyMomma Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Lovely.
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AzialSilvara Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you like it. :)
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Yiskah-chan Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Very Lovely. :iconheartjumpplz:
I feel this way too. So, I know the feeling even if I'm older.
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AzialSilvara Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Why thank you!

And I wouldn't rather be any other way.
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Yiskah-chan Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Very welcome, dear! :iconhugheartplz:

Yup, same here.
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MysticalPoet Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011   Writer
First off, amazing poem. I....I don't think there's a thing I don't like.
Secondly....if I wasn't already happily taken, I'd want to be with you just for this poem. It makes me just want to curl up next to the poet, I'm assuming you, and just...let guards down. I'm sorry if that sounds incredibly weird, or strange, but that's how it makes me feel. I'm 27....but I found my fiancee at 22. I had never dated before that....because I was like you: not wanting just a relationship, but a lifelong companion. Keep looking, she's out there :)

Aaannnd....sorry again if this comment sounds weird.... ^^;
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AzialSilvara Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Nah, I'm not bothered in the slightest. And honestly, I'm flattered that you'd think that. I am the writer, and your situation does describe me to an extent. I'm not interested in casual relationships at all. If it isn't deep, and if it isn't real.. I don't want it.
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MysticalPoet Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011   Writer
Glad I didn't creep you out ^^; I...just really wanted to let you know that this is an amazing poem, that would make knees weak. I love it so much :heart: Never was into casual relationships....just...I kept looking for my soul mate, and didn't do anything until I found him XD Well worth the wait however.
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AzialSilvara Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Well, you certainly did that! And really? That's quite a compliment in itself. :D

And nah, neither am I. I'm true love or bust.
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MysticalPoet Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011   Writer
XD Yep...weak knees. Good thing I was sitting!
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AzialSilvara Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed!
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feescreamzrawr Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Really nice work. I like how you played with the words.
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AzialSilvara Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Why thank you! It was a pleasure to put together. :)
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feescreamzrawr Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
that's nice to know.
Most guys don't write like this. I'm impressed.
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AzialSilvara Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Most guys my age don't think the way I do when it comes relationships. And no.. I'm anything but full of myself or narcissistic. It's just true.

I'm happy to hear you enjoyed it. :)
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feescreamzrawr Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Don't worry about it, it never crossed my mind that you were full of yourself.
When it's true, it's true. xD

And indeed I did. ^^
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AzialSilvara Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I see. That's good!

And I'm glad you did! :D
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feescreamzrawr Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
^^
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